Love,
There’s an angular disturbance in your cheek
in a certain orientation
of my mind-
blowing (nothing trivial word-discounting)
Of a gear-shifting magnitude
A tenable image of God in you
While you in your Frankenstein suit
Faith-heal starbursts of chemicals
Leaping soups of subjectivity
Unending trajectory of asymptotic insanity
As if I could never see you, my love,
But for the angular disturbance in your cheek.
(movie image: Peter Cushing as Victor Frankenstein)
Updated for dVerse OLN with Mish hosting: 11/25/2021
Absolutely love this. 🙂 I have to ask…is the chart image an actual equation?
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Oh yeah. Just click on the graphic to see. So glad you like my little foray into math, albeit asymptotically 🙂
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This is so very clever, in style and lexicon…
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Thank you kindly, Ain. 🙂
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What a journey into the asymptotic image of an angular cheek.. once you see that how can you unsee it?
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exactly. 🙂
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Lordy. I would tell you how much I admire this poem except that I would have to pick my jaw up off the floor first. Your range is impressive. The last poem I read of yours was lofty and gorgeous. This one is layered, clever, and both foreboding and amusing. Frankenstein! And that one so-well-conceived anchor line, it’s ideal but subtle. That’s it I’m adding your blog to my side bar.
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High praise indeed, Shay. Pardon me while I take the time to revel in it. You are too sweet, my friend. Thank you!!!
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There’s an angle here – “a tenable image of God in you” — how did that turn so?
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the fulcrum eternal 🙂
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This is absolutely stellar writing, Dora! I am especially moved by; “Faith-heal starbursts of chemicals/ Leaping soups of subjectivity.” 💝💝
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Thank you so much, Sanaa! 🌹
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I was never good at math, and I may not even be good at poetry, but I know what I like, and I like this poem. Also, there are few better models for an angular cheek than Peter Cushing.
~ornery owl~
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I will treasure this compliment. Thank you, ornery owl. As regards Cushing, no one better for angular and cool 😎
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Wow! you spun me around the galaxy with this one, Dora! Not sure I follow your math equation, but i loved your thoughts and this line in particular…
Leaping soups of subjectivity…
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Glad you liked this, Dwight! It was a fun write. 😀
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:>)
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I enjoyed this unique rendering and your crafty word smithing. Especially liked “Faith-heal starbursts of chemicals / Leaping soups of subjectivity”
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Glad you enjoyed it, Mish. Thanks for hosting. 🙂🧡
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Very interesting reading
Much💛love
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Thank you Gillena. 🌻
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Wonderful! I must have learned about this at school, but it made more sense the way you wrote it 🙂
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Poetic sense beats math sense. 😀
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First, thanks for the introduction to the asymptotic–the concept of combining approaching zero with intersecting in infinity(forgive my math impairment–that’s a purely literary analysis 😉 ) But above and beyond that is where you’ve gone with it, straight inward into the zero-sum game of the other, where intimacy breeds both familiarity and alienation, appreciation and repulsion. Gorgeous writing, too. Thanks for the pleasure of reading it.
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Joy,
You thrill me with your close reading, THANK YOU, and one hundred percent agree all the elements you discern are there as you say so beautifully. Why, oh why, do relationships have to be this way? As it is, we only have tangential encounters but that’s something right? 😀
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Fantastic poem, Dora! I love that first line and how it ends the same way.
“Love,
There’s an angular disturbance in your cheek…”
Great turns of phrase throughout the whole thing: “gear-shifting magnitude” and “Unending trajectory of asymptotic insanity” I particularly like 🙂
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You’re very kind, thank you so much Sunra!!! ❤️🧡💚
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You’re most welcome 🙂
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