Furious flurry of feelings
like dead leaves unraked
materializing ghosts unlaid,
(ma)lingering selves militarized
against the declared
new life
I wish for snow:
fresh lain cover of blotted sins
the book whose leaves
speak volumes of blood
divine, lain at the crossroads
of death.
dVerse's quadrille (exactly 44 words), "linger"; click on Mr. Linky to read more. image from wallpapersafari.com
Dreams from a Pilgrimage 
So deftly written and so true. Thanks for joining us!
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Linda,
I’m so glad you liked it. Thank you!
pax,
dora
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Made me think of “sins made white as snow” Luv where you stuck the lingering.
Nice write
Much💖live
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Gillena,
You caught the allusion! Appreciate your thoughtful comments, thank you. 💖
pax,
dora
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I especially liked the second stanza with the white snow covering sin and the book speaking volumes of divine blood at the crossroads.
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Frank,
Thank you for saying so. It was fun working out the puzzle of how to say it when that’s the heart of it.
pax,
dora
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Agreed!
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🙏💖🙂
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I love the opening alliteration “furious flurry of feelings”!
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Beverly,
I’m so glad you do because I spent the most amount of time deciding whether or not the alliteration was just too much. Now you’ve reassured me! Thank you.
pax,
dora
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Beautiful Dora! Snow has that cleansing effect. Your metaphors and images of the divine are well done!
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Dwight,
Thank you for those generous comments. I was absolutely interested in the allusion to “wash me and I shall be whiter than snow” of Psalm 51.
pax,
dora
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That came to mind as I read your poem!
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I thought it would have. 🙂
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an interesting progression into cleansing in the autumn of life, masterful writing Dora
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Your descriptions create a blessed parallel with our Christian witness.
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B.,
Grateful for your thoughtful comment, thank you.
pax,
dora
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I admire the alliteration of Furious flurry of feelings, clever use of malingering, and the spiritual imagery of the blood divine at the crossroads of death. Thanks for joining us Dora!
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Grace,
My pleasure, quadrilles are always a fun challenge. Glad you liked it! And thank you for your generous comments.
pax,
Dora
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Wow! Beautifully written. Love how you brought in the redemptive snow!
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Carol,
I’m so glad you enjoyed it! Thank you. 💞🙂
pax,
dora
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Only forgiveness can lay those malingering ghosts to rest! A thought-provoking write, Dora.
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Lynn,
Amen! I couldn’t agree with you more. Thank you so much.
pax,
Dora
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malingering is such a great word here! The spiritual imagery is powerful, this world is so messy and “unraked” until the snow covers it all! ❄
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Tricia,
No question about the messiness and the need for redemption. Appreciate the thoughtful comments, thank you. 🙂💖
pax,
dora
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Pleasure! ❣
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“furious flurry of feelings
like dead leaves unraked”
– This is wonderful alliteration.
Then the wish for snow to cover it all.
I picture it as a desire for a fresh start.
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Ali,
A new start, a clean slate, all the mercy of redemption to begin again is what I was going for, “new every morning” by grace. Thank you.
pax,
Dora
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I like how you used the prompt word and I also like the thought of fresh snow falling to cover sins.
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Lisa,
That metaphor from the psalms is too apt not to use. Thank you.
pax,
dora
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Dora, you are welcome.
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I love the Biblical imagery of the purity of new-fallen snow. Having spent one season in it, though, I think I’ve had enough to last a lifetime!
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Ingrid,
I imagine you get as much snow as rain in Slovenia! Thank you.
pax,
dora
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In the North, yes! We’re on the coast now, so only the cold wind to deal with in winter 🥶
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Well, it’s a change anyway. No more shovels, just more wind proofing. Brr.
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Beautiful post Dora, thank you so much for sharing! 🙂
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Sam,
Very kind of you, thank you!
pax,
dora
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I also like the alliteration, and (ma)lingering is so clever, and the layers of meaning.
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Merril,
Well, with snow there ought to be layers, amirite? 🙂I’m glad you like it, thank you so much!
pax,
dora
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You’re welcome, Dora. 😀
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Beautiful.
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Anna,
Thank so very much.
pax,
dora
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As so often with your writings I enjoyed several re-reads. I love the terse, crisp lines and how you pulled in the two-fold meaning
“(ma)lingering selves militarized
against the declared
new life”
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Laura,
Thank you for those generous words. They are very much appreciated.
pax,
Dora
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Dora, from the opening line alliteration to the cleansing snow, it is a divine quadrille.
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Punam,
Thank you! So grateful for your comment.
pax,
Dora
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My pleasure.
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Amazing quadrille. Life and death. Love the first line.
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Thank you, K.
pax,
Dora
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Beautifully expressed – drawn in with your alliterative introduction and then your search for redemption.
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Thank you so much. Glad you liked it.
pax,
dora
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Very nice imagery and feeling in this poem, Dora!
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Thank you, Charlotte. Glad you enjoyed it!
pax,
dora
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Feelings are often like ghosts–not solid, but present nonetheless. How to acknowledge them without letting them take over is always a challenge. (K)
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K.,
Exactly. They seem to encroach too easily.
pax,
dora
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Knowing you, I’m reading that second stanza as especially clever, Dora 😍
-David
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David,
Has my poetry given me away? A risky business we’re in. Thank you.
pax,
dora
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Beautiful autumn poem and picture!
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I’m so glad. Thank you, Jimmy.
pax,
dora
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You’re welcome
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Just prayed for God to guide you and husband to better weather
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🙏🙂TY
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YW
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