An inch the moon moved, me eyeing
through sleepless lids I lay dying:
apple-fed.
Dim my sight, breath weakening
death’s poison ever strengthening:
apple-cursed.
Whispered prayers, hurried words of flesh
plead soul’s deliverance afresh:
apple-damned.
Darkness now floods the mind distraught
I would, I could, but I cannot:
apple-bent.
God’s Son whose flesh my guilt impaled
On cross for me o’er death prevailed:
apple-freed.
Grace at dVerse challenges us today to write a Compound Word Verse, an unfamiliar form to most ous I daresay. She writes: "The Compound Word Verse is a poetry form invented by Margaret R. Smith that consists of five 3-line stanzas, for a total of 15 lines. The last line of each stanza ends in a compound word and these compound words share a common stem word which is taken from the title. (In the first example below the stem word is “moon” from the title “Moonlighting”; the compound words related to the title are moondust, moonbeams, moonsongs, etc.) The Compound Word Verse (3 lines) has a set rhyme scheme and meter as follows: Rhyme Scheme: a,a,b Syllable/Meter: 8, 8, 3 Click on Mr. Linky to read more and join in!
Dreams from a Pilgrimage 
Opening Iines hooks in the reader right away. Love the narrative from being apple fed, apple cursed to apple freed. Who knew we can make compund words of apple.
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Thank you, Grace, for your generous comments and also the introduction to a great verse form. It was a lot of fun to try out. As for apple, well, apples just seems to go with autumn!
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The first four stanzas I had Snow White in mind, and then the fifth splashed that all over the rock of my faith. Well done indeed.
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Thank you, Christopher! I’d completely forgotten about the possible misdirection until you reminded me. I’m glad you liked the poem.
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Well written Dora.
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Thanks so much, Rob.
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Love the title and the truth behind each verse, good one!
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As usual…wow, well done! 😊
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Thank you, my dear! :>)
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nice one Dora, you used the format well!
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Glad you liked it, Kate, thank you!
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you’re most welcome
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A most unusual and effective word choice, Dora! Lots of food for thought here (if you’ll excuse the pun :-))
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I like how you picked an apple and (ex)pressed the gospel!
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Thank you, Lynn!
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An incredibly creative way to utilize the word “apple” in your poem …. well done.
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I got stuck on it every which way! Thanks, Helen!
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You created some great apple compound words!! I just now realized I used my compound words in the 883 lines, and not at the end. OOPS
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Thank you, Beverly. As to your 883 lines & compound words, rules are just guidelines, like the pirate captain says! 😀🙂
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This is awesome! Last verse did it all for me!
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Thank you, Mary. I appreciate your commenting!
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I like the way you invented your own words. The apple is such a wonderful fruit–it’s strange it has such negative associations. (K)
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It may be ill-deserved, Kerfe. I’ve heard scholars suggest it may be the pomegranate that is intended given the geographical context. Which I could readily accept as I love me some apple pie!!!
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I do too.
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😉
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I see a structure of Creation-Fall-Redemption in this apple compound poem!
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I couldn’t quite get in my favorite potential “compound word”: apple-pie! Next time. 😀🥧❤️
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Love apple pie!
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I feel the apple here representing the Original Sin… working your life to be apple freed. Very well written.
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Thank you, Björn. Exactly what I was going for, in my bulky compound-word way!
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Reblogged this on Brave & Reckless and commented:
Meet Dora at Dreams from a Pilgrimage. She’s awesome.
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Thank you!
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